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01 April 2006 @ 08:16 pm
'Fundamentally Altered', 2/5 for stagesoflove R2 - Arousal, #2 Excitement
Author: darkhavens
Title: Fundamentally Altered, 2/5
Pairing: Sam Winchester/Dean Winchester
Fandom: Supernatural
Rating: NC-17 overall
Words: 255
Feedback/Concrit: darkhavens @ slashverse.com
Disclaimer: Not mine, never will be. No harm, no foul, no money made.
Warnings/Squicks: Wincest.
Summary: Repeated near-death experience would affect us all.
Notes: Written for stagesoflove 2006, Round 2, 'Five Stages of Sexual Arousal'.
Also posted here.
#1 - Desire.



You're not quite sure what you expect - a roundhouse blow to the jaw, maybe a look of abject nausea and revulsion as he spits out bitter words that slice your soul like dull knives. You're expecting anything, everything, but his tongue in your mouth, his hands in your hair, holding on, twisting, opening you up and taking everything you've swallowed down and hid.

The solid press of his thigh against your groin, the heavy heat of your cock against his hipbone - it's like a match to an oily rag. Conflagration. Inferno. A flash fire, tweaking every nerve you never knew you had.

You don't even know you're moving till your back slams up against an unforgiving surface. Wall? Tree? Floor? You're too far gone to tell. There'll be bruises in the morning, red blue purple smears of colour that you'll wear with silent pride and quiet awe. But the morning seems an age away.

The here and now is filled with him - over you, around you, in you, on you, he's the air you breathe. He's hands on flesh, he's lips and teeth and tongue and cock. Sharp edges grinding hard against your own.

You've never felt this alive before, this full, this heavy, this ready to do or die, to fly or fail. It's exhilarating.


It's heaven and hell in one testosterone-filled time bomb. The countdown started when your lips hit his, but you don't know what time you've got before it blows sky high.

The fear makes you even harder.



Part Three



 
angelic fruitcakeimagination55 on April 1st, 2006 07:46 pm (UTC)
Poetic genius, man. Nuff said.
Loved this just as much as the 1st part.
darkhavens: sn bed guh [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:16 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

Sometimes the poetic thing takes me by surprise. I sit down to write and can almost feel the pulse of the piece before I've even typed a word of it. I'm so glad it works because I honestly don't think I could turn the damn thing off it I tried. *g*
tabaqui: s&dcloserbyliteratitabaqui on April 1st, 2006 07:48 pm (UTC)
Oooh, man.
Yeah.
Bruises.
:)
*shiver*
darkhavens: sn pretty when bruised [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:17 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

we do seem to have a mutual thing for bruises, don't we? *g*
MF Luder: SPN jacketmf_luder_xf on April 1st, 2006 08:50 pm (UTC)
You're a god.
darkhavens: sn damaged [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:17 pm (UTC)
Hee! Thank you. :D

*poses at the altar*
belleimani on April 1st, 2006 09:01 pm (UTC)
You are so descriptive and sexy with you writing! Love it.
darkhavens: sn brotherlove [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:20 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

I think this is one of the first (if not the first) piece I've written in second person POV and it feels so much more involved and immediate than my usual third person externa; view. I'm just so very glad it works! *g*
belleimani on April 17th, 2006 12:37 pm (UTC)
It does work. I'm so surprised this is your 1st First person pov. It's very well written!
Someday you'll need to stand tall again: Supernatural - Jensen Sexy Bitchemella on April 1st, 2006 09:16 pm (UTC)
Dear lord this is sexy. Love the hot heat and feel of it. Great descriptions and character p.o.vness. :P Great job babe! :)
darkhavens: sn rowr [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:21 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

I just said that I think this is my first real attempt at 2nd person POV and I'm so very happy to see that it's working. :D
Shainalady_shain on April 1st, 2006 09:47 pm (UTC)
There'll be bruises in the morning, red blue purple smears of colour that you'll wear with silent pride and quiet awe.

Wow. That line, there is just perfect.

I can't recall reading anyone who's able to pack so much punch into something that short.
darkhavens: sn pretty when bruised [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:23 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

I have a special love of bruises (it's one of my many kinks) and I think these boys probably grew up comparing bruises and trading tall tales about how they got them, so earning them in this new way would be significant. :D
a fiction worthy wind: Dean/Sam - SNquietdiscerning on April 1st, 2006 10:02 pm (UTC)
Mmm. Bruises. Yes. Soso perfectly stated.
darkhavens: sn pretty when bruised [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:24 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

Mmm. Bruises. Yes.

My feelings in a nutshell. *g*
WWDD? - What Would Donna Do?jellicle on April 1st, 2006 11:53 pm (UTC)
You brought poetry and made me feel more. Thank you.
darkhavens: sn damaged [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:24 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I do love to see people 'getting' the poetry of it.
I am Derek's vocal eyebrows: hd; vs [me]literati on April 2nd, 2006 04:07 am (UTC)
ohmyguh!

like you said, this could be anyone and I choose to view it that way.

HOTNESS!

darkhavens: sn bed guh [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:25 pm (UTC)
Hush! I know who you think it is - you have a one-track mind. :P

Thankee, sweetie. :D
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darkhavens: sn strip [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:28 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

I suddenly realised that there was no indication of who they even were, right up until the final snippet of part 3 when they finally spoke each other's name. Up to that point it was almost anonymous. The POV in my head started out as Dean, but I have had moments when I wondered if it was Sam. *g*
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darkhavens: sn brotherlove [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:28 pm (UTC)
LOL! Thank you. Intnese - I like that! :D
tyrical: SPN_Samtyrical on April 6th, 2006 11:39 pm (UTC)
Whoa! This is some powerful stuff you can feel the need and the want and the heat. You are truly talented in this wordsmith thing, there's always and element of poetry, the visuals always take me to the seen and I am always moved by more than just the sexiness of it all.
darkhavensdarkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:30 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

Ah, another person who gets the poetry. *is happy* It sneaks up on me sometimes and then i wonder if I'm going crazy and if it works. Validation is always embraced. :D
     Mandya_phoenixdragon on April 11th, 2006 06:15 am (UTC)
Ooo...Myyy...Guuuuhhhh...

Hot..Heavy...Hot...

Visuals...burned into...brain...

*Whimper...* I love you...
darkhavens: sn wincest [literati]darkhavens on April 16th, 2006 09:31 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

I have the same visuals seared into my cortex too. isn't it grand? *g* *smooch*
kitty_poker1: kali_sama-brothers-fangirlskitty_poker1 on April 28th, 2006 09:08 am (UTC)
You know, I just assumed the pov was Sammy's. Maybe because I think of Dean as being dominant. Whatever, the writing is pure poetry. It just seems to have fallen from your fingertips so naturally and fluently. Beautiful. *hugs*
darkhavensdarkhavens on May 17th, 2006 06:11 pm (UTC)
Thank you, darlin'!

Dean is dominant, but he's easily bruised too. *g* I definitely wrote this from inside Dean's head but several people have said they were reading it as Sam. :D