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10 September 2005 @ 10:50 pm
'The Safe Word', 500 words for slashthedrabble challenge #42 - It Hurts
Author: darkhavens
Title: The Safe Word
Pairing: McKay/Sheppard of Stargate Atlantis
Rating: NC-17
Words: 500
Concrit: darkhavens @ slashverse.com
Disclaimer: Not mine, never will be. No harm, no foul, no money made.
Warnings/Squicks: Bondage, a highly effective safe word.
Summary: Rodney can be a very toppy bottom.
Notes: This is my McShep porn cherry being popped. It can only get kinkier. *g*
Beta: Quick and dirty beta performed by kitty_poker1.


The Safe Word

"Oh! Oh, God, that hurts." Rodney moaned and shuddered and John froze in indecision.

"You stopped. Why did you stop? Did I tell you you could stop?" Rodney tried to surge up and back in an effort to drive John deeper, but John had done an expert job of tying him into position, and all he managed was a negligible twitch.

"You said it hurt."

"Yes, yes, and--?" With a sigh, Rodney resigned himself to explaining things again.

"This is the reason we agreed on a safe word before we started. The only time you should ever stop is when you hear that word. Or maybe," he muttered softly, "you've decided to add to your sexual repertoire, because frankly, stopping like that while I'm trussed up like a turkey and this turned on? That truly is the definition of sadism!"

He twitched again and then clenched down hard on John's erection, buried deep - but still not deep enough - inside his body. The rough Athosian blanket chafed his knees and scratched his shoulders, abrading his left cheek and temple as he knelt, unable to move.

"Remember what we chose to be the safe word, John?" He clenched again as John reflexively pulled back. "Remember the way it caused us both to wilt when we tried it out? Until you hear me call that out, keep doing what you're doing. But do it hard, and do it now, John. Fuck me, dammit!"

The harness of knotted ropes, leather straps and military webbing drew John's attention from Rodney's heart-shaped ass to his bound hands, each lashed tightly to a corresponding lushly muscled thigh. He still couldn't quite believe that this was all for him - his toy, his carnal playground, because Rodney said it was.

"Are you still awake back there?"

The snarky though impeccably politely phrased query easily snapped John out of his 'Mine! All mine!' reverie. With a feral grin, John began to move.

Hands trained by combat tightened painfully on pale hips as John held onto Rodney as though he'd never let him go. He lost himself in taking what he wanted, rutting, riding hard. His tongue traced random patterns on salt-sweet skin between the bonds. Rodney tasted like heaven. And chocolate-covered pretzels.

Each furious slam of concave belly against buttocks sent Rodney sliding forward with a whimper, gasp or groan. Skin, hypersensitive from friction, kept his nerve ends singing, a symphony of overblown sensation he wouldn't, couldn't, fight. The pressure in his chest expanded, swelled to swallow him whole, and his limbs began to tremble from the strain.

"Oh God, John, I… I… Oh! Yes!" And then words and thought and meaning were beyond him as he whited out.

* * * * * * *


"So, you really liked that, huh?" John's droll words accompanied Rodney's slow return to consciousness, and he huffed happily in response.

"It's freeing, liberating. I think it feels like flying. You should try it next time."

"Huh. Maybe. But really, Rodney, Kavanagh?"

"It's the most effective safe word I've ever had!"
 
Mistress Marilynmistressmarilyn on September 10th, 2005 10:16 pm (UTC)
Absolute perfection.

I love the concept. I love the writing. I love it all.
darkhavens: rodney who's sleeping w john [literati]darkhavens on September 10th, 2005 10:29 pm (UTC)
Thanks! :D

I decided it was time write my first McPorn. *g*
who said what now? - remey on September 10th, 2005 11:40 pm (UTC) (Expand)
who said what now? - darkhavens on September 11th, 2005 01:35 am (UTC) (Expand)
who said what now? - alizarin_nyc on September 11th, 2005 09:12 pm (UTC) (Expand)
who said what now? - darkhavens on September 19th, 2005 01:34 am (UTC) (Expand)
tabaquitabaqui on September 10th, 2005 10:19 pm (UTC)
Heeeeeee.
Ooh, nice.

And, hrmmm, that last little bit is in an utterly differnt text size and font.
Huh.

But! Smut! And good smut!
:)
darkhavens: mcshep look of love [literati]darkhavens on September 10th, 2005 10:28 pm (UTC)
Thanks! My first McSmut. *g*

I don't understand why the formatting went wonky for you, it looked fine for me. I always save my work as a text file so there's no hidden formatting, and the only thing that separates those two chunks of text is a hairline, which I have now replaced with centered asterisks. Does it look okay now?
who said what now? - tabaqui on September 10th, 2005 11:15 pm (UTC) (Expand)
mahoymahoy on September 10th, 2005 10:22 pm (UTC)
Rodney really couldn't be anything *but* a bossy bottom in my opinion.
Rrrawr! Very nice.
darkhavens: shep rodney naked now [literati]darkhavens on September 10th, 2005 10:30 pm (UTC)
Oh, I'm sure, if he was correctly gagged and bound... *g*

Thanks! :D
Tezateza on September 10th, 2005 10:26 pm (UTC)
...kavanagh....

Yes, v. effective. XD I heartheartheart BossyBottom!Rodney.
darkhavens: shep intense passion [literati]darkhavens on September 10th, 2005 10:36 pm (UTC)
Thanks!

Kavanagh really is the ultimate safe word, guaranteed to wilt any hard-on at a hundred paces. *g*
who said what now? - sp23 on September 11th, 2005 01:33 am (UTC) (Expand)
who said what now? - darkhavens on September 11th, 2005 01:37 am (UTC) (Expand)
Tonia Barone: Destroytoniabarone on September 10th, 2005 10:31 pm (UTC)
"Huh. Maybe. But really, Rodney, Kavanagh?"

"It's the most effective safe word I've ever had!"


*LOL* As soon as they'd said that even the thought of the safe word wilted them, I KNEW what it was gonna be, but still! Thank you for sharing!
darkhavens: shep mcdaydreams [literati]darkhavens on September 10th, 2005 10:38 pm (UTC)
I wondered if people would guess. *g* The man has amazing willy-wilting powers! I think it's the hair. *g*

Thanks!
who said what now? - toniabarone on September 10th, 2005 10:39 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Morgaine: McKay - Snarkdragonbetween on September 10th, 2005 10:39 pm (UTC)
OMG! That's so great.

"Huh. Maybe. But really, Rodney, Kavanagh?"

"It's the most effective safe word I've ever had!"


And I just got the worst (best?) picture in my head of things going just a little bit to far and Rodney yelling out Kavanagh to get John to stop and Zeleka or someone walking by and thinking Rodney's having sex with Kavanagh, or masturbating to the thought of him, and rumors spreading all over Atlantis about it. (And, ok, it wasn't so much a still picture as a mini-motion picture.)

~ Morgaine
darkhavens: mcshep uhoh [literati]darkhavens on September 10th, 2005 11:02 pm (UTC)
LOL! Oh dear. Rodney would be horrified, John would probably keep giggling and winding him up about it, and Kavanagh... Kavanagh would probably try and sue Rodney for sexual harrassment or something, unless he thought he could get more out of actually bedding his boss. *shudders*
who said what now? - dragonbetween on September 10th, 2005 11:17 pm (UTC) (Expand)
     Mandya_phoenixdragon on September 11th, 2005 12:01 am (UTC)
Loved it! You oughta do slashy McPorn more often! LOL! Loved the safe word - and Rodney was actually quite tame, for Rodney! Excellent dear! Send more!
darkhavens: rodney who's sleeping w john [literati]darkhavens on September 11th, 2005 01:38 am (UTC)
Thanks! :D

I'm sure, now I've written one, more McPorn will follow. Tis the nature of the beast. *g*

As for Rodney being tame? Well, he's trying to ease John into his kinky side gradually. ;0
who said what now? - a_phoenixdragon on September 11th, 2005 01:46 am (UTC) (Expand)
I am Derek's vocal eyebrows: hd; fdl [me]literati on September 11th, 2005 12:02 am (UTC)
Great ficlet! Tied-up Rodney is very tasty.

However, promise me you will NEVER mention sex and Kavanagh in the same piece again. I mean it. I'm already with flu and a bloaty head, I don't need the added horror.

::smooch::
darkhavens: mcshep uhoh [literati]darkhavens on September 11th, 2005 01:39 am (UTC)
Hee! ^^^pets you^^^

I promise. :D

Thanks, darlin'!
lamardeuse: M/S 2lamardeuse on September 11th, 2005 12:59 am (UTC)
"This is the reason we agreed on a safe word before we started. The only time you should ever stop is when you hear that word. Or maybe," he muttered softly, "you've decided to add to your sexual repertoire, because frankly, stopping like that while I'm trussed up like a turkey and this turned on? That truly is the definition of sadism!"

This is perfect Rodney. And the ending? Bwahahaha! :)
darkhavens: mcshep lube [literati]darkhavens on September 11th, 2005 02:10 am (UTC)
oops. *g*

Thanks!

I can't imagine a more suitable word for ending any and all sexual interest than that name. *shudders*
ex_kyrieane267 on September 11th, 2005 02:08 am (UTC)
*worship worship worship*

Fantastic!
darkhavens: mcshep look of love [literati]darkhavens on September 11th, 2005 02:10 am (UTC)
Hee! Thankee, sweetie!

I knew I'd get porny with them eventually. *g*
Hope: shothopeowl on September 11th, 2005 02:14 am (UTC)
LMFAO OMG that was perfect. It nearly made me snort coffee out my nose.
darkhavens: shep rodney naked now [literati]darkhavens on September 12th, 2005 02:45 am (UTC)
Yowch! Thanks. :D
it only burns when I breathe: mcshep_onetouch_xanphibianspikedluv on September 11th, 2005 02:19 am (UTC)
LOL Loved Rodney being such a toppy bottom. That was so in-character. And I guessed the safe word had to be Kavanagh, lol!!
darkhavens: shep look at me [literati]darkhavens on September 12th, 2005 03:01 am (UTC)
Thanks!

Kavanagh really was the only possible choice for a safe word for those two. It's one that could never fail to have the desired effect. *g*
sarren: sex objectsarren on September 11th, 2005 04:15 am (UTC)
Hee.

Very cool. God, Rodney is hot tied up.
darkhavens: rodney are you wearing it major [literatdarkhavens on September 12th, 2005 03:02 am (UTC)
Thanks!

He is, isn't he? But then, so is John. I might have to tie him up next time. ;)
who said what now? - sarren on September 14th, 2005 04:23 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Jimbojust_jimbo on September 11th, 2005 04:16 am (UTC)
Well, you know I like the bondage theme. I especially like it well-written like this. And 'Safe Word' is a great title and a great payoff. I don't know the fandom, but I'm sure if I did I'd get the "Kavanagh" bit.

You're a good writer, and your graphic stuff is well done (unlike some fanfic I've read). Yeah, it's a little over-the-top, but that can certainly be forgiven in a setting like this.

His tongue traced random patterns on salt-sweet skin between the bonds. Rodney tasted like heaven. And chocolate-covered pretzels.

Wow. What a description!

(Noticed you disabled comments to the community so people could only comment to your own LJ. Since I do exactly the opposite--linking to the community from my LJ to get other people over there to play--I was surprised by this. I'm assuming you want to capture and control your own comments, but I am curious about the fake cut/disabled comments.)
darkhavens: mcshep drrrty boys [literati]darkhavens on September 12th, 2005 03:22 am (UTC)
I don't know the fandom, but I'm sure if I did I'd get the "Kavanagh" bit.

Just imagine the one person you would least like to be reminded of during an intimate moment. The one name guaranteed to dampen your ardour. *g*

You're a good writer, and your graphic stuff is well done (unlike some fanfic I've read). Yeah, it's a little over-the-top, but that can certainly be forgiven in a setting like this.

Thanks! :D (I've read some of that other stuff too. *shudders*)

I have been known to write funny and/or realistic sex, full of knees and elbows, complete with thigh cramps, but sometimes the out-and-out porn just begs to be written, and that little touch of OTT just adds to the enjoyment. *g*

I'm glad you enjoyed, and commented. ;)

As for your question, I've actually posted a (much too long) response to this and other points raised in this post by brn_gamble (found via metafandom) so I won't repeat myself here. ;)
Lerah: snark because I'm smarterlerah99 on September 11th, 2005 06:58 am (UTC)
Bwahahahahahaha!!! After this I may make Kavanagh my safe word too. I love this fic. I love where Rodney sighs and starts lecturing John. I love where Jonh thinks "Mine, all Mine"

Thank you so much for posting this. :o)
darkhavens: mcshep lube [literati]darkhavens on September 12th, 2005 03:24 am (UTC)
Thanks for commenting. :D

Kavanagh truly is the ultimate safe word, so long as your other half is also a fan of the show. *g*